Just wanted to share another example of great lyrics and how they tell a story with few words; not even ‘big’ words. It’s just truth. And truth is what you want to convey in your fiction. This is an excerpt from Erykah Badu’s “Other Side of the Game.”:
“Me and Baby got this situation.
See, Brother’s got this complex occupation.
And it ain’t like he don’t have education.
‘Cause I was right there at his graduation.
Now I ain’t saying that this life don’t work.
But it’s me and baby that he hurts.
Because I tell him right he thinks I’m wrong,
But I love him strong…”
Just from reading that you can immediately figure out what this guy does for a living, what their relationship issues are, and how he treats her. Just from those 8 sentences. Love it. Try writing your scenes in sentences like this and then proceed to actually write the paragraph. You can say so much with so little. It’s a great way to practice.